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"In the city of my birth, I had a dream..."
Ai no Kusabi Vol. 2 by Yoshihara Rieko 
22nd-Aug-2008 09:16 pm
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Yoshihara, Rieko. Ai no Kusabi: The Space Between Vol. 2 - Destiny. Trans. Kelly Quine. Gardena, CA: Juné, 2008.
          Summary: With illustrations by Michihara Katsumi. Riki gets caught pickpocketing--by the Blondy Iason Mink. Iason is inclined to be forgiving, so in return Riki takes him to a love hotel. But, as it turns out, he is unable to forget Iason, even after taking up a new line of work as a courier under "Scarface" Katze. By the time they meet again, Iason has decided to make Riki his pet...
          Comments: Holy hell. I didn't think it was possible for this series to suck more than it did in the background-loaded first volume. But even though things actually happen (and sex between the two principals is actually sort of had!) in volume two, pretty much everything else takes a turn for the worse. The translation is turgid, purple, and poorly adapted. It's also poorly edited; I saw numerous missing words, typos, and incorrect punctuation. Get Quine an editor, goddammit! The novel is not shelf-worthy as it stands, and subsequent volumes won't be either unless someone does something different... pronto.
          Even with a better adaptation, though, I'm not sure how much the book would have been improved. The narration is repetitive and internally inconsistent. How many times does Riki need to be shocked that Iason is a Blondy before the realization sinks in? How many times do we need to be told that Ceres residents don't have a ID chip behind their ears? Yoshihara's expansion of the story reads more like piecemeal addition, and there isn't a digression trivial enough not to be pursued at florid, breathless length. At least there are plenty of pretty illustrations by Michihara Katsumi to help me forget how bad it all is...and remind me that I'd rather be reading new installments of Joker.
          Notes: paperback, 1st American edition; first published in Japan by Seibido Shuppan in 2003
          Rating: 2.5/10 - Even more self-abuse in the form of *ahem* "prose," courtesy of Yoshihara, Quine, and DMP. (And no, I'm not talking about the masturbatory kind here either.)
Comments 
24th-Aug-2008 12:16 am (UTC)
Heh heh...uh-oh. I hope you find Volume 3 to be better edited. -_-;
24th-Aug-2008 12:25 am (UTC)
It was better, actually. I hope this means you're editing the series, not translating... :P
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